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Chapter 3 had a lot of the same issues as 4.

When you write storys that focus on Mabel, it's like Dipper goes numb. He doesn't have anything to contribute, he answers questions passively. Weirdness that he should be leaping to investigate, he ignores like he is half asleep.

Dipper seems to be reading the author's mind. If you, as the writer, know that something has a mundane reason that will be explained in the next scene, Dipper never mistakenly theorizes a paranormal theory for it. He ignores blind alleys that he usually explores.

"Gnomes? Oh man, I was way off!"

Dipper would react (somehow, possibly over reacting) to waking and finding an unexpected breakfast. But in the story, he seems like he is on prozac.

Dipper is normally just a bit jittery and mentally flinches at the unexpected.

Wendy: "How do you feel now?" Dipper: "Scared, anxious, a little itchy."

Dipper is always walking around with a book and/or a pen. In "Tourist Trapped", long before he finds Journal 3, he sits at the bottom of the grassy hill Mabel rolls down, writing in his own jornal. It might be implied that the voice-over is the text he's writting in the brown book he brought from Piedmont.