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Ralphini wrote: Alright. I read over the thread you wrote, and overall I think it was pretty good. It was a bit disjointed, but it was pretty well written all in all.

It was meant to be written as if it was thoughts written in a Journal like in the show. The writer's personality only comes through slowly in the process. First you only get the unemotional, intellectual side, but the writer can't help but reveal himself, even if only in the choices of things he thinks important.

I thought it started out too distant, which is why I went back and wrote a bit about the author feeling a lot of self doubt because he hasn't found a place of concentrated weirdness like Gravity Falls yet.

But the first section is more about the town than the man exploring it.

Do you think it is still too disjointed to follow, even despite the format?

I'll post more of it later. The site crashes on me if I try to post too much at a time.

The funny parts come much later. And I'm not sure how much formating I need to distinguish the different writters. I think it's kind of hokey how the commcially released books represent Mable's entries in pink ink. Oh, come, on!