User blog comment:DanceMixGirl/Gravity falls fan-made episode 1/@comment-5915186-20130109200243

Cool story, but let me give you something to think about, Scarlet won't just kiss Dipper on the cheek right away, you need to explain stuff to show the readers why she kissed Dipper on the cheek,she just meant him so she would just kiss Dipper on the cheek, No! You have to be more creative, sorry I don't mean to be rude but I'm just trying to help you out with the story but cool story.