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The tour around the circus is a good narative structure to build on. You could either explore the physical description of the environment, or use it to springboard into the thoughts and memories of the characters.

It's got a little action at the end, but I'd like to see Dipper interact with his surroundings a little more. Could Dipper enounter something that interferes with his search, requiring him to sort out some minor conflict so he can continue with his original purpose?

Here's a story I didn't realize I was going to write. It suddendly poped up while I was looking at a GF fan art page that hints about Pacifica having a rather pushy crush on Dipper.

http://gravityfalls.wikia.com/wiki/Thread:175439

It's only a first draft, so suggestions for improvements are welcome. There are spots where I might be hinting at what I'm not obviously showing.

I tried to work in some plot elements from the show, but the story is supposed to be set on a weekend during the school year, a year or two after the events of the series. The characters are a little more mature, but not too much. I hope.